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[–] TheAntiZealot 0 points 2 points (+2|-0) ago 

Overuse of "these." Would be better with even just one instance of "those."

[–] Caesarkid1 [S] ago 

[–] TheAntiZealot ago  (edited ago)

It is an improvement.

Might I recommend that you make the red & green text white, except for the specific words "these" and "those."

You can leave the blue and yellow as-is. The yellow being especially functional. While the blue is open to debate.

Now this may be nitpicking, but if the white box (and corresponding "to those") were a unique color that would be the final edit.

Even a child would understand it the first time with these changes.