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[–] gopluckyourself 0 points 11 points (+11|-0) ago  (edited ago)

You're getting buried because your posts are nigh impossible to read due to rant style language and insanely poor formatting. I literally don't want to read this even if it is good information just because it's a bigass block of text. If I had to make any suggestion to you it would be to get rid of the personal feelings parts of stuff and separate all of your ideas. Maybe make more than one post because there's about 3 different ideas in your block.
I've reported the post anyways so that you maybe get motivated to think out how to more properly convey the message you're trying to get across.

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[–] Julian55 [S] ago 

thank you, I feel overwhelmed. I put out 10 hours of video. It demonstrates what I am saying better than words can. People need to see the images on a visceral level and relate to them. I probably should not have timelined for 20 minutes in first episode, but I am trying to do the best I can. The pizza is the rose of old. The pizza has literally opened up the rose.

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[–] Julian55 [S] 0 points 1 point (+1|-0) ago 

sorry, I just split it up in paragraphs to make it easier to read. thanks for criticism.

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[–] gopluckyourself 0 points 3 points (+3|-0) ago  (edited ago)

My only other criticisms are to try to make a synopsis of your information. You're (I know not purposefully) making your information hard to digest by ranting around it. Try not to make appeals to your reader begging them to believe you as well, this is a waste of your time and ours. If the information is good it will be received.
For future videos as well come up with a script before hand and try to follow the suggestions I've made about your writing. Keep your visual helpers to as few things as possible and only use things that help you get your point across. Inundating people with information just makes them want to stop reading.
edit: also look into these two things how to write a research paper and how to write a persuasive paper
http://www.wikihow.com/Write-a-Research-Paper
http://www.wikihow.com/Write-a-Persuasive-Essay

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[–] archons 0 points 1 point (+1|-0) ago 

I like what you have to say and I want to read more but yeah you're presentation is all over the place. I look forward to more though.

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[–] FuckTheseSickos ago 

dat wall o' text tho.

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[–] gopluckyourself 0 points 1 point (+1|-0) ago 

Basically. I had to force myself to read it just to see if it was even remotely related.