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[–] ZapptheBrannigan [S] 0 points 1 point (+1|-0) ago 

Firstly thanks for reading, and second I am glad you enjoyed it, I was really hoping I nailed that kinda old school sci fi feel. As for the dialogue, I cant english so great sometimes. I will be taking some time here soon to learn me how to english and will be re editing the whole work later anyways. Just trying to get the character development rolling and a bit of story arc and world building for the reader.

thanks agian!!

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[–] SurvivorType ago 

No problem, thanks for posting this. I really liked it.

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[–] ZapptheBrannigan [S] 0 points 1 point (+1|-0) ago 

Im going to be finishing the part one soon here i think, moving onto part two. I kinda have no idea how long this is gonna go for yet so it may turn into some silly long story. Im trying to keep it a bit compact until I have it all figured out and my ducks all lined up.