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[–] 17316938? 0 points 1 point (+1|-0) ago  (edited ago)

Great stuff mate. A little look at the Rhyme and Metre, and you could pass as an Aussie Bush Poet around any campfire. With a glass of fine red of course.

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[–] 17322855? [S] 0 points 1 point (+1|-0) ago 

I'm looking, but don't know what to look for. I know fuck all about poetry, I just think we need more of it.

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[–] 17325937? 0 points 1 point (+1|-0) ago  (edited ago)

You are doing a great job mate. Try writing it the way you would want to hear it. The way you would like to hear it delivered by someone else from a stage, with a microphone. I write mine in short 4 line stanza's, and rhyme the last word/s of the 2nd and 4th lines. eg

The missile hit him in the chest,

And it made complete the farce.

Because it drove him back a yard or two,

And sat him squarely on his arse.

Laying bruised and badly beaten,

His breath a ragged hiss.

The poor bugger was covered head to toe,

In the paper and the piss.

Good luck friend, keep going, the sillier the better and more smiles on the faces of your listeners.