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[–] Tree_Snake 2 points 0 points (+2|-2) ago 

Is it supposed to be mocking passive-aggressive white knight beta-biggots? If it is, then bravo.

The palate is grotesque. The font choices kinda indicate it as a mockery rather than an earnest attempt at storytelling, but that's probably something only fellow trolls will pick up. The style is perfectly misplaced: early nineties medical pamphlet mixed with rage comic.

The story is alomst poetic in it's absurdity. Are we to assume that the protagonist is about to hit his knees in prayer? Or will he run over and wrap around the trollup like a human chastity belt? Because beating them up wouldn't be very Christian, nor would offering himself for rape in place of her.

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[–] Dumb_Comment_Bot [S] 0 points 4 points (+4|-0) ago 

Is it supposed to be mocking passive-aggressive white knight beta-biggots? If it is, then bravo.

He not really a white knight. He shoots the woman too. Don't want to release it before that's clear.

The palate is grotesque

I used the standard palate like a lazy bumhole. Actually do you want to send me an example of a better one? I can copy it.

Fonts are standard too, I could download new ones, if you have suggestions.

The drawing style can improve. Which panel do you feel was best drawn so I can use it to go forward.

I assure you I am not a troll, I do it in earnest. Just check my comment history.

Let's just say he isn't a very good christian, and just murders people. Everyone has problems and no one is perfect.

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[–] Tree_Snake 0 points 1 point (+1|-0) ago 

"Understanding Comics," by Scott McCloud goes through all this a lot better than I ever could.

But basically, try to understand that every element (page number, dialogue-bubbles, width of line; every single thing) of your comic is at your disposal to help tell your story or convey your ideas. If those elements aren't in-sink, you've contradicted yourself with spurious details.