[–] 17336879? 0 points 1 point 1 point (+1|-0) ago (edited ago)
Now That one, is perfect. That one gets your message across. It has flow to it and that basically is your Rhyme and Metre. I really like this one mate. I have written a good few over the last 6 - 7 yrs, and recite a couple if the company is good and the beers are flowing. Brilliant to have a couple of, hmmm, risque ones up your sleeve. They get the older folks laughing and cackling a fair bit. You should be able to find some funny stuff via DDG. If you like 'em, recite 'em. And use them as examples for your own style of writing. Great stuff, I love it when a plan comes together. Stay well.