0
10

[–] Dumb_Comment_Bot 0 points 10 points (+10|-0) ago 

Sounds like something I would do.

0
18

[–] crazyjuan 0 points 18 points (+18|-0) ago 

Please be real, please be real.

0
4

[–] Vaati 0 points 4 points (+4|-0) ago 

Supposedly a teacher did come forward and say that this really happened in their class, but it was about a decade after the story first surfaced, so it's hard to say if it was legit or they just wanted to claim credit.

0
8

[–] FeelinFroggy 0 points 8 points (+8|-0) ago  (edited ago)

We play this game every now and then around the dinner table. Usually pretty interesting until the youngest gets to it, then everything gets set on fire or a volcano blows everyone up or something, but it almost always ends there.

edited to add: ahh, once everyone turned into dinosaurs, then they all blew up.

[–] [deleted] 0 points 5 points (+5|-0) ago  (edited ago)

[Deleted]

0
1

[–] Rainy-Day-Dream 0 points 1 point (+1|-0) ago 

once everyone turned into dinosaurs, then they all blew up.

could you please bring the full story of this to v/fakedinofacts?

0
11

[–] GreatnessD 0 points 11 points (+11|-0) ago 

one sweaty nig

0
2

[–] whisky_cat 0 points 2 points (+2|-0) ago 

That's all I read too

0
1

[–] Pawn 0 points 1 point (+1|-0) ago 

clearly they shared a black person.

0
0

[–] UrCoolerOlderBrother ago 

A sweaty one at that

0
16

[–] Vaati 0 points 16 points (+16|-0) ago  (edited ago)

I've always been more sympathetic to the man in this story. Personally, while non-sepculative stories aren't my cup of tea, I prefer them to interplanetary sci-fis. But goddamn the girl's story is boring, and just reading over it, it looks like the guy is inventive, knows how to convey what he wants, and is (moderately) flexible while the girl is stuck in "I am sophisticated and literary" mode.

You already know the author is more interested in sounding artsy than with telling a compelling story when they start with shit like indecision over tea, and her writing style is an unholy mix of "I phrase things like an intellectual" and "technically breaking grammar rules but most casual speakers do this" so you can tell that she doesn't have an ultra-literary mastery of English, but is going to make everything she writes sound awkward in an attempt to look like a literary genius. Meanwhile, the guy is never going to be James Joyce, but his writing style has a freer feel to it. He's writing in a way that makes the sentences interesting rather than proper. His word choice is more tonal and action oriented while the girl is almost entirely introspection without aim.

I had the most obnoxious peer review partner in creative writing one semester who always tried to write ultra-literary short stories that were so painfully boring, in part because he sucked at finishing 5 page assignments (which should be fucking nothing for a guy who wanted to major in writing) but mostly because he was too caught up in trying to be literary like the chick in this story, and his characters sat around being introspective while the author refused to let you know what incident they were actually thinking about because withholding key information from your readers that they need in order to understand what the hell is going on is apparently the right way to create intrigue. And tbh if I got stuck writing a tandem story with him and he started off with his normal shit, I'd have started my contribution by having his character be eaten by a dragon.

0
0

[–] MirrorMan ago 

That's why I love third person limited. You can take it to the extreme and never include a single thought. What boils my blood the most about writing is when a writer does not expect the reader to participate. Everyone likes to make inferences and jump to conclusions based on limited information. If you dissect everything, cut it up into the tiniest digestible pieces, and try to force feed the reader, then the conversation dies. A story is a conversation not an essay. If you are writing effectively you can imply many things and trust the reader to fill in the blanks. The time to go all in on explicit details is when describing action.

0
1

[–] Vaati 0 points 1 point (+1|-0) ago 

I don't mind when third person gets into a character's head, but it is obnoxious when overdone, and I'm most definitely not a fan of first person.

But this guy's issue was that he was simultaneously stuck in his character's head and that he expected too much of the reader in the way of inferences. If you asked him, he always had an elaborate story (like, an actual story a sequence of events) behind why his character was so morose. There would never be any hints at all in the writing he shared with the peer review group, yet he was shocked every damn time we met up and no one in the group had any clue what his characters were upset about.

We kept telling him that A) he needed to give us more than that the characters were upset if he wanted us to be able to work out what happened and B) his introspection wasn't that interesting and he should try and write about whatever event led the character to be upset instead, but he never listened. It was like he had this weird chip on his shoulder where anything close to a conventional story was too passe for him, and everyone in his class including the professor was obviously too dense to pick up on his subtle genius.

1
3

[–] baphometsrage 1 point 3 points (+4|-1) ago 

Women's writing is a crime against the art. If you ever look for food ideas half the ones by women have these long asinine stories attached to like a fuckin sauce recipe for no reason, never mind their reviews on things

0
2

[–] Vaati 0 points 2 points (+2|-0) ago 

Don't get me wrong here. I agree that stories in recipe books are asinine. I'm not downvoating you for that. I'm not even downvoating you as a woman writer. I'm downvoating you because you seem to have missed that the pretentious idiot I had to work with in my writing class who wrote at least as bad as the woman in the tandem story was a guy.

Shit writing knows no gender.

0
1

[–] dried_up_frog 0 points 1 point (+1|-0) ago 

Yeah, Pride and Prejudice, one of the best books I've ever read, is a "crime against the art." Fellate me.

0
4

[–] kooch50 0 points 4 points (+4|-0) ago 

Stupid fuckin laurie and her damn chamomile tea

0
1

[–] AmaleksHairyAss 0 points 1 point (+1|-0) ago 

It changes every time I read it.

0
5

[–] qwop 0 points 5 points (+5|-0) ago 

It was a while since I had a good uncontrolled hysterical laugh. Oh boy. I will rest now.

load more comments ▼ (2 remaining)