[–] Negro_Nazi 0 points 6 points 6 points (+6|-0) ago (edited ago)
Good work. I got beat almost to death two years ago when I stopped a robbery in Rochester MN. Of course it was niggers... I did good against the first two but got hit in the back of the head by a bottle. The best part is there were dozens of people just watching. I ended up getting saved by the police and going to a brain treatment facility. If even one person had had my back we could of won. My combatives instructor would of been proud. I was also sloppy drunk so that didn't help.
[–] Dumb_Comment_Bot [S] 0 points 2 points 2 points (+2|-0) ago
Hey maybe you want me to plan out the fight for the next episode. I have to draw the guy kill the 5 sandniggers and don't want it to look stupid.
[–] Negro_Nazi 0 points 1 point 1 point (+1|-0) ago
I would love too. Do you want to meet me over in the chat room?
[–] Dumb_Comment_Bot [S] ago
I hope so too, I'm still experimenting a lot with the app I'm using. I've also decided to use a darker colour scheme because as someone pointed out it looks like a medical pamphlet.
[–] Tree_Snake 2 points 0 points 2 points (+2|-2) ago
Is it supposed to be mocking passive-aggressive white knight beta-biggots? If it is, then bravo.
The palate is grotesque. The font choices kinda indicate it as a mockery rather than an earnest attempt at storytelling, but that's probably something only fellow trolls will pick up. The style is perfectly misplaced: early nineties medical pamphlet mixed with rage comic.
The story is alomst poetic in it's absurdity. Are we to assume that the protagonist is about to hit his knees in prayer? Or will he run over and wrap around the trollup like a human chastity belt? Because beating them up wouldn't be very Christian, nor would offering himself for rape in place of her.
[–] Dumb_Comment_Bot [S] 0 points 4 points 4 points (+4|-0) ago
Is it supposed to be mocking passive-aggressive white knight beta-biggots? If it is, then bravo.
He not really a white knight. He shoots the woman too. Don't want to release it before that's clear.
The palate is grotesque
I used the standard palate like a lazy bumhole. Actually do you want to send me an example of a better one? I can copy it.
Fonts are standard too, I could download new ones, if you have suggestions.
The drawing style can improve. Which panel do you feel was best drawn so I can use it to go forward.
I assure you I am not a troll, I do it in earnest. Just check my comment history.
Let's just say he isn't a very good christian, and just murders people. Everyone has problems and no one is perfect.
[–] Tree_Snake 0 points 1 point 1 point (+1|-0) ago
"Understanding Comics," by Scott McCloud goes through all this a lot better than I ever could.
But basically, try to understand that every element (page number, dialogue-bubbles, width of line; every single thing) of your comic is at your disposal to help tell your story or convey your ideas. If those elements aren't in-sink, you've contradicted yourself with spurious details.
[–] Dumb_Comment_Bot [S] 0 points 9 points 9 points (+9|-0) ago (edited ago)
This will be the final quality, obviously it'll get a bit better as I improve. I do it on the phone on the bus as I stare muslims in the eye.
I've reworked some of the panels with a darker scheme today. http://sli.mg/a/cZuIy8
[–] bikergang_accountant 0 points 1 point 1 point (+1|-0) ago
Really cool. I'm surprised you are able to do it on a phone.
How long will the end product be? What do you plan to do with it when it's finished?
[–] Dumb_Comment_Bot [S] 0 points 1 point 1 point (+1|-0) ago
This is about 1/3 of the first episode. It'll just be something for voat to enjoy so I don't plan on it being too well done.
Then again, I may still want to redo a lot of it. By the time I was done the last panel I redid the first few because they looked poor in comparison.